WW2

 

 

This week he have been Working on WW2 and the boy in the striped Pyjamas book we had a task to make a slideshow of WW2 this is me and Mitchells WW2 slideshow. 

Descriptive Writing

WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers

My story

One dark abandoned old broken warehouse one chair sitting in the middle of the floor with graffiti on the walls. Suddenly!!! a movement from under Some boxes oh no said bob WHAT! said Tim a screeching noise! came out from the boxes in the storage area what said Tim what should we do run OK then said bob ceap up or else you will get killed!!! Oh why am i in the hospital said Tim well you broke your leg because you pounced  off a storage container.     

SELF ASSESSMENT

That I have done nouns,verbs,adverbs and adjectives and  i need to work on punctuation.

Pair assessment

I think you have used descriptive language and really extended yourself. The work ons I have would be proofreading for omissions and punctuation.